Showing Not Telling; Essay Brainstorm

5 Oct

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Skill: Showing not Telling-

-instead of telling us something, show us!

Examples:

Telling: Roger is mean.

Showing: Roger tripped me in the hallway. At lunch, in between harassing freshmen, he was throwing french fries at our table.

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Telling: The girls were excited.

Showing: Giggles and screams filled the arena. The soft curls were now damp with perspiration and the anticipation of the event. They held tight to each other in a mock effort to contain themselves. Arms flailed upward, and voices echoed in varying tones. The moment was here.

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Telling: The room was vacant.

Showing: The door opened with a resounding echo that seemed to fill the house. Cob webs once attached flowed freely in the air as the open door brought light to a well-worn floor. The light gave notice to the peeling paint on the walls and to the silhouettes once covered by pictures. The new air gave life to a stuffiness that entrapped the room. Faded and torn white sheets covered once new furniture now drowning in dust.

More in-depth discussion Herehere, here, and here,

Quick Write: Use Showing Not Telling

Describe something you  did this weekend without telling what it is. Show instead! 75 words! Post your answer on Google Classroom. You may be asked to share!

Essay Brainstorm Sheet

Work on this essay Brainstorming Worksheet: Essay Brainstorm

 

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